nghề viết văn Article: tim, trái tim of the soilder

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posted by delta117

i awoke pain everywhere it felt like my skin was melting but yet i did not scream traing kicked in and i found my black armoar to any normal sentient bieng it would be like an anchor but i am not normal am i after that i grabbed my weapons the first was a set of 2 curved assian knifes curved and made for my hands một giây standard ar súng trường it had no scope only sights all i needed to kill at 100 yards third a shotgun normal used in swat teams tactical 12 guage shot gun máy bơm action forth 44mm glock i holousterd it and my knifes my knifes at arm length pistol on my hip then an explosion rocked my cell and soilders poured in i dispathed them with my a.r 5 dead hundreds to go i stepped outr my cell through the hole my enemy s made my radio head set in my mũ bảo hiểm crackled to life " mac come in mack this is alpha team we are in poisition" i paused looked for any thêm targets and replied " copy that alpha team this is mac i am on my way any word frombeta hoặc omega?" " beta's in poistion no word from alpha but stats says they're alive alpha team out" good know i could get my three teams out of this base and get back to the HQ. down a carfully polished corridor i searched for the enemy no sighn it was eerily quiet the only noises were the sound of my boots hitting thewaxed floor and my silent controled breathing that was bad.after three floors up i found some action i had switched to my shotgun for close combat. two teams of well trained soilders 2 sets of súng aimed at my head 2 easy. each team consitsted of five soilders so there wetre tenguns pointed at me i had a small windo w of 3 phút to kill them hoặc they would have help so i targetetd the first team i shot two of them dead an injured one there i shot the injurd one and got knocked on my back bởi a smg i lifted my pistol up as i fell and shot my shooter in his face he crumpled to the ground then the other was stuned a how i had killed his theam in four giây i keep time on this stuff then i knocked him in the neck with the handel of my gun and he fell to the groungd he had a broken thacea and larenix instant death i reholstered my pistol and and picked up an anti-personal fragmentatin grenade from a dead soilderpulled the pin and threw it at team 2 it landed in the center and blosumed into a firey hoa of shrapnel i pulled my pisol back out and checked the bodies one injure d1 shot in the head changed that all others dead in 7 giây i was good

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Cullen-fan That was really good do you write alot?

harold This was a little hard to read at first, since there was hardly any punctuation at all, but by the end I was getting into it more. You might play with verb tense a bit more if you are going for the stream-of-consciousness writing; present tense and 1st person perspective work well together, particularly if you intend to spell words phonetically because the character wouldn't know any better. A good example of this (in my opinion) is the novel [u]Feersum Endjin[/u] - large parts are written in first person, present tense, from the perspective of a warrior who spells everything phonetically. I think moving into present tense would make the other stuff seem more intentional. I'm interested to see more, and particularly curious about the cause of the pain he feels in the beginning. I also like the humorous bits, like the aside "i keep time on this stuff" in the middle of the fight. Some suggestions: proofread after taking a break from writing the piece, so that you can view it with fresh eyes. The spelling may be intentional, and it works, but the words blending together "soilderpulled", "tenguns", "thewaxed" don't work as well for me. Also, you should check which team is talking to which team: "no word from alpha but stats says they're alive alpha team out" Whether or not you decide to switch it to present tense, it's got a lot of energy and it flows quickly. I'm interested to see where you go with it.

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The Here

posted by zanhar1

Really old thing I dug up. Because I was reminded of it.

Elise stood before two paths. Upland trail, read the sign, rickety and made of moss eaten and decaying wood. And Downback Thickets, indicated its sister sign.
What a lonely, bleak place, Elise pondered. She looked skyward. The surrounding trees were rather intrusive, blocking her view of the foggy-quartz sky.
She nudged at a rock with her big toe.
Her big toe?!
“Where are my shoes?” She muttered aloud. When had she Mất tích them? How hadn’t she noticed the mud squishing between her toes? She looked over the ground.
No sign of her Uggs anywhere....

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What if I Believe bạn Now?

posted by para-scence

Inspired bởi the song, "Circle" bởi Flyleaf. :)

"His tim, trái tim ripped out to hiển thị me he loved me, but I wouldn't believe him. He did all that he could, I still would not believe him!"

I sat on the school bench, my head in my hands. The whole world was spinning, and I couldn't keep my balance. My tim, trái tim was encased in a thick glass of guilt. Nothing I could ever do would change this...

He had told me he loved me.

But he was my best friend; he couldn't feel that way about me. It just wasn't meant to be...

So I'd pushed it off. I'd laughed, and joked around with him about it. He seemed to go along with...

The Loved Ones

posted by edwardsca

It was a cold winter morning. The wind was a cold, nhanh, swift breeze. I was upstairs in my room turning page bởi page reading.I went down to eat my warm, golden biscuits on the old cracked wooden table. I went to go get the bucket and some water to wash up, the bucket was broken and the water was freezing cold like the rough winter nights. After my refreshing bath I went to go get dressed, I put on my áo sơ mi which was red as my own dear mother's quả anh đào, anh đào sweet lips. I zipped up my váy it was black like the midnight sky, and buckled my black shoes. I was walking down the dirt...

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Then He Kissed Me(Short poem)^^

posted by ZekiYuro

Well,he walked up to me and he asked me if I wanted to dance.
He looked kind of nice so I đã đưa ý kiến I might take a chance.
When he danced he held me tight
And when he walked me trang chủ that night
All the stars were shining bright
And then he kissed me.

Each time I saw him I couldn't wait to see him again
I wanted to let him know that he was thêm than a friend
I didn't know just what to do
So I whispered " I tình yêu you"
And he đã đưa ý kiến that he loved me too
And then he kissed me.
He kissed me in a way that I've never been kissed before,
he kissed me in a way that I wanna be kissed forever more.

I knew that he was mine so I gave him all the tình yêu that I had
And one ngày he took me trang chủ to meet his mum and his dad
Then he asked me to be his bride
And always be right bởi his side
I felt so happy I almost cried
And then he kissed me.

Fuller baby

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~Writing~

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A new world-chapter one: Gone draft

posted by liissaaxx

The only sound that could be heard in the large hospital of Melbourne was the continuous beeps from the room in which Jamie's daughter lay.

The white walls and the bright yellow lights were too much for Jamie too take and the câu hỏi which he dreaded to ask himself filled his head. First of all why is my precious Stephanie in here? Nothings wrong with her she stayed at Ashley's all weekend. What could have happened? and secondly why hasn't that receptionist stopped staring at me. She hasn't looked away since i sat down.
Jamie looked down at his watch, it was eight in the morning. He had been...

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Huntress

posted by Cutebutcrazy--

My name is Gennive Mason.
I am 13 years old.
And oh yeah. I'm the last vampirehunter alive.
You pobally think it's so cool. " Oh yeah she's the last vampire hunter alve. bạn must be everyones hero." Wrong. No one and I repeat no one can know about me hoặc ma cà rồng hoặc warer Người sói hoặc shape- shifters hoặc witches. bạn see it goes against code. The sacred code of all night creatures even I have to fallow it hoặc I'm dead. bởi law it says if a vampire hunter tells anyone about the night creatuures they send some one then it's bye-bye hunter. Lovley isn't it. I find it kinda ironic. My job is to find and...

Mất tích Memories Part 3

posted by dragonwriter

I awoke a couple of hours later. I looked around for the old man but he was nowhere ti be found. I got out of the giường and starting walking to the front door to see if he went outside. When I opened the door there was nothing but black. When I turned back around he was standing there.
"Where were bạn going? bạn need your rest so go back and lay down." He went to grab my arm to lead me back to the giường but I pulled away. "My name is Shaun so stop calling me boy old man. I don't need to lay down, I need to go." As I turned back to the door he grabbed my arm. "Go where? bạn have nowhere to go....

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Whether Paid hoặc Not A Writer Writes bởi Gary Goldstein

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Honeymoon With My Brother interview with Franz Wisner and Kurt Wisner

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100 Candles

posted by teamphantom

I’ll never forget the ngày I had encountered a ghosts with my best friends. And I will be happy to share that story with you.
It was August 20th exactly one week before the start of middle school. My best friend Alex and I sat outside on the curb and ate our half melted dâu, dâu tây ice cream on a cone. It must’ve been 95 degrees outside because we could feel our sweet dripping off our faces. We didn’t say much because the calefaction made us not want to be social. We sat there in silence and licked our ice cream.
“What do bạn think middle school will be like, Collin?” Alex broke the...

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Peaceful composition

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Into The Ocean

posted by RainSoul

What do bạn do when the gray waves roll over your head, and your body is too weak to swim ashore. Do bạn panic and scream and try anyway to break the surface of the water? Do bạn silently cry and pray and tell your loved ones bạn tình yêu them one thêm time. hoặc because bạn know it's futile to fight đệ trình to the lulling cold darkness kissing at your eyelids? Do bạn let the salty seawater drain into your lungs and choke to death's waiting arms?

Or do bạn float to the surface and wait for the storm to pass and sunlight to pierce your shivering mass of a body?.. bạn choose wisely.. bạn wake up in a...

Monologue

posted by xoxpoisonxox

This is a Monolouge I wrote a little while cách đây for drama class. We had to write a dramatic one. So this monologue is about a girl who is talking to her therapist about a gần đây event with her friend.

Tell me what bạn think!

My mother says bạn can help me - Help me make sense of it. I don't beilive in therapists - But I guess ill .....0give it a try..

You know, Some say suicide is the most selfish act one person can make.. I used to think this too. But now it doesn't make sense to me how the most selfless, kind , person I know - knew- could be labled as selfish..

How long have I known her? Well...

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Let's play What's The Word? game

posted by ZekiYuro

Here are the definitions of the words.Read and guess what they are before đọc the right các câu trả lời I write below.

1.It's a person who works in a restaurant,takes the thực phẩm from the phòng bếp, nhà bếp to the tables.
2.It's a place where bạn go when bạn want to buy something.It's a very big cửa hàng where bạn can buy anything.
3.It's a thing which bạn use to talk.It's a kind of machine,it's very small and nearly everybody has one nowadays.
4.It's an adjective.It's the opposite of fat,but means thin and acttractive.
5.It's an adjective again.It's how bạn feel when bạn have a lot of things to do but bạn don't have...

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Character Names!!!!

posted by breebree446

To think, most of my character names come from a thrift store baby book!

Baby Name Books!

My #1 resource is the baby name book I bought from a thrift store. It's a lifesaver! Not only does it have over 5,000 names but origins, boy and girl names, and alternate spelling. But, if bạn can't get a hold of a baby name book there's always...

Name Websites!

Just as good and pretty much the same thing. They have access to millions of names online! One website I find really useful;

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Symbolic Names!

Often, writers give thier characters a name that has a certain meaning. For instance, one of my characters is named Roni. Which is short for Veronica....

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chó

posted by Spotty_Vision21

I shouldn’t have shot the dog. I definitely shouldn’t have shot the dog. Even if he did chew upon my prized drumsticks, and feast upon my freshly-baked brownies. The little white-and-brown terror, Mickey, belonged to my neighbor. My neighbor, an 87-year-old chain-smoker named Mary, rarely left the confines of her living room. She sat, ngày in and ngày out, as her precious mutts wreaked havoc about the neighborhood.
You can see it! My house, the little beasts have chewed upon everything their gnashing, tiny, sharp little teeth could find. I did my best to keep them out, but the little bastards...