xFluttershyx Awesome!

pikachu700 indeed

btflash [B]... really? You're really trolling now. There's no denying it at this point. There is no way you could butcher (no pun intended) a fanfiction AND a fan-made video with this terrible fanfiction without the intention of trolling. I'm sorry if this comes across as mean (which it probably will), but this was a bad fanfiction. There's no going around it, this fanfiction is just poorly written. I'm going to list all of the things wrong with this fanfiction, and it's not going to be one of my nicer moments. This first one goes all the way throughout the story. 1) The "writing style" - Really, this whole fanfiction looks like a poorly-written play. That's the feel I got from it. There is absolutely NO effort on descriptive details as far as I can tell, the grammar is horrible, and there are errors as far as the eye can see. I don't know HOW anypony could possibly NOT see that. I can literally tell that you "wrote" this in barely an hour considering how little effort you CLEARLY put into this. 2) The creativity? -Ok, for one thing, you used characters from 2 different fictional works. Pinkamina Diane Pie from "cupcakes," and what seems to be fluttershy from the .MOV series. You never stated this AT ALL, and you never acknowledged who the original characters belong to, whether it be hasbro, the MLP staff, or the people who actually CREATED the characters based on the show. -I might let it slide a tiny bit, due to the "original" idea of a human getting kidnapped by pinkie to be baked into a cupcake, but even THAT is heavily based on the fanfiction "cupcakes," and you didn't even acknowledge THAT. 3) Story/Setting (or lack thereof) -As for the story in general, WHERE are we in this story? is this equestria? Earth? You don't even explain how the human gets to equestria/how Pinkie Pie gets to earth. -I'm assuming we're in equestria, considering some other ponies pop up, but even THAT is a long shot considering there is absolutely NO setting description OR backstory in this story. I felt Like I was just plopped right into the middle of a story with absolutely NOTHING to go on (it's like that one time I started reading the "Animorphs" book series with the eleventh book. This happened when I was, like, ten, so it got kind of confusing). 4) The ending???? - Just... what? The ending was just, for lack of a better word, stupid! As far as I know, Fluttershy from the .MOV series is a complete PSYCHOPATH! I've watched enough criminal minds to know that psychopaths don't change their behaviors THAT easily. -I mean really? a hug and a kiss to make everything better? That's even more idiotic than the garbage that most kid shows are feeding us nowadays. In fact, that's A LOT like the garbage that most kid shows are feeding us nowadays. -And another thing, that was just REALLY REALLY RANDOM. I'm talking Pinkie Pie random, here. You set the ending up kind of like this. Fluttershy: I'M GOING TO KILL YOU! *hug & kiss* Fluttershy: I'll go to what's most likely my doom now. See ya later. Save me a cupcake. *Improved grammar version brought to you by BTPoke grammar correction inc.* -Really, the ending is just terrible, makes absolutely no sense, and just shouldn't be an ending to a fiction that's based on/related to/a rip off of "cupcakes" So overall, what did I think of this story? It's not even a story. Is it a terribly-made not-even-a-play version of cupcakes/Shed.MOV? Yes. Should it even be considered a fanfiction? Probably not. I am BTFlash, and I hope you enjoyed this little rant of mine. -BTFlash [/B]

RocksLikePie ^No offence btflash but I kinda wish you would just lay off sometimes I mean what if the person doesnt have enough time to make this or what if this the persons first time making it and when she finishes she wants to look where to improve and where to tone down a bit I mean c'mon give the person a break just saying

btflash Have you made an article on fanpop before? there's a feature that allows you to privately (on your fanpop account) save the article for future editing purposes. If you don't have enough time "at the moment" to make an article, you can simply work on it for now, save it, and continue working on it later. There should be no reason to rush when it comes to making a fanfiction.

RocksLikePie Yes I have made an article and okay fine you got me but just....plz lay off a bit sometimes...just carry some of your notices in your head

btflash I'm hoping not to draw this into an argument, so I'm just going to say this: I have self control. Believe it or not, I do. I can resist to criticize some people if I'm sure that they mean well, or if they show at least SOME writing skill. It's things like this, though, that just make me lose a little bit of faith in the writing capabilities of this club. Can't you see how little effort was clearly put into this? I'm sorry if you do claim to have tried your best, pikachu, but you really rushed way too fast in the making of this "fanfiction." There is a special amount of effort that you have to put into a fanfiction in order for it to be of any quality. This fanfiction just seems to lack any effort in my opinion, and I just couldn't help but say something.

RocksLikePie Well you are right sometimes I get triggered by things to write a comment its not you fault and I can accept that

Anime_Gir1235 @btfflash JUST CALM DOWN MAN I DID MY BEST YOU DON'T NEED AN ARGUEMENT

btflash ^ ??? YOU did your best? wasn't this made by pikachu700?

pikachu700 RIGHT NOW IN Pika so deal with it

pikachu700 I DON'T CARE ABOUT YOUR NONSESE

btflash Ok, then. If you refer to my previous comment (the one before RocksLikePie's comment), I said this: "I'm sorry if you do claim to have tried your best, pikachu, but you really rushed way too fast in the making of this 'fanfiction.' "There is a special amount of effort that you have to put into a fanfiction in order for it to be of any quality. This fanfiction just seems to lack any effort in my opinion, and I just couldn't help but says something." That's my story, and i'm sticking to it, no matter what you say. You really could've done A LOT better with this fanfiction. I just felt like I had to say something. I really don't want to get into another argument over something trivial like this. You can just ignore all that I've said and move on if you want. Or, if you do care about your writing skills, you will pay attention to what I have said. You may or may not learn from it. Yes, I do realize I have said some hurtful things in my "commentary," but I believe they had to be said, yet I am still sorry for saying such things.

pikachu700 does it look like i effing care

RocksLikePie ^ Really? Couldnt you at least say: "Ok I get I just don't want any trouble" or whatever? I mean really I'm not trying to be rude or mean or anything but at least be nice about it...

pikachu700 kudos for ROCKS like pie

RocksLikePie ...Ok..

btflash @pikachu700: What is the matter with you? I was hoping to just end this earlier, but you only responded in the most stuck-up manner I can conceive. The way you've been commenting on your own works kind of screams to me that you only care about comments that make you look good, even though your fanfiction is far below quality. You've been conducting yourself like you're better than other people. I'm just going to end this with saying you're a troll, alright? You can either respond like the troll that I see you as, you can make up for your actions, or you can even just not respond. Your choice.

whiteclaw WTF, I don't even?!