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I'm nghề viết văn a fanfic called "Almost Alice" about Alice, Jacob, Jasper, and Bella, and I'd really like it if you'd review. If bạn like it, I can put up a link to the story (which is much farther along than the first chapter, I can tell bạn that). And if you're gonna be mean about it, don't bother commenting. Thanks!
-Alice <3

Almost Alice
Chapter One: Smoke


“I win,” Alice đã đưa ý kiến smugly, holding out her hand towards Edward. “Again.”

Edward rolled his eyes as he searches his backpack for Alice’s “prize.” I smiled. She was getting to be exactly like Jasper, always betting on something....

Mysterious love

-chapter one-



It was my first ngày of 11th grade.My alarm clock went off I stayed in giường for a little while I didnt want too get up.But after a miniute hoặc two I just got up.I went too my closet and pick out some clothes really it was just what I seen first.After I dressed my self I went down stairs too see my father in the phòng bếp, nhà bếp makeing coffee.Soon he would be on his way too work, just like every day.My father is a lawyer for the town of Bartonville,Arkansas. Every body liked him thoughs who didnt did not know him very well,but he is very queit kinda like me.Him and my mother...

bella's pov

edward took my hand and we walk toward my parents

when my mother look at me her eyes got wider and my dad look surprized
edward was still holding my hand i was getting thêm nervous with each step a took foward

"Hello mother , father" my mother nodded and also my father
after a một phút of silence
then my father look at edward
"Are bạn carlisle younger brother Edward??" my dad ask and look at me when he đã đưa ý kiến his name

probably remembering when i interrupt him and đã đưa ý kiến edwards name i look at edward and he was repressing a smile probably someone was thinking something funny
my edward was...