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xin chào do bạn like this poem i did about alice and jasper's love?

these two were insepreable
the trust and tình yêu in his eyes
made her feel an toàn, két an toàn
when she smiled
it brightened his ngày
the thrill of the adventure
the adventure of tình yêu
was making alice and jasper
fall ever so passionetly inlove
tình yêu is like the wind
bạn cant see it
but bạn can feel it
tình yêu folowed jasper and alice
because they were destined for eachother

twilight_lover9 posted hơn một năm qua

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TEAM-EDWARDxxx said:

I Like it...

But is okay i guess.. maybe sum thêm stuff bout like ma cà rồng haha that would be interesting..

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bạn could just go to the request a peom câu hỏi and say that u kno! but thanx! for the tip

twilight_lover9 posted hơn một năm qua

Little_Cullen said:

tình yêu it. Punctuation a bit funny, but the actual nghề viết văn is really cool. I especially like the bit about he makes her feel an toàn, két an toàn and her smile brightens his day. I tình yêu it. Keep it up!

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thank-u so much

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twilightgirlNo1 said:

i think its great but some of the lines could be a little better.

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twilight0girl said:

it's a perfect poem about them.

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Twilightpup said:

Its really good , bạn should make one about Bella and Edward

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emilyemmett said:

That is really good!! bạn should write another one!! Maybe about the meadow hoặc Jacob and Renesmee hoặc something!

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sessa123 said:

Its not bad, i always thought a poem used to jus have to rhyme but narr its really gud maybe fix up some little thing and maybe have a good thing to rhyme bout, like werewolves, ma cà rồng anything LOL – Liên minh huyền thoại KEEP IT UP HUN XX

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