xin chào guys can bạn help me with somthing???

I have the first chapter of a new possible story but I want to see if anybody is going to read it...
And I was wondering can bạn guys read it and tell me what bạn think in a bình luận hoặc email?
And I don't no the name yet so can bạn guys help out with that to? Its not very long hoặc hard to read.Oh and I can give bạn a link to it.

And there my other story mysterious tình yêu bạn can check out on the spot articles.