Alpha và Omega Article: Dayz... Omegaz Part one: Road Rage

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posted by CoolSwagWolfAlt

A rainy apocalypse survival-Hunger game like in towns and cities
Humphrey,Poor Mất tích and stranded on his own. He finds a few other rival Người sói that agree with him to join,
Humphrey: *Soaking with rain* "What the fuck is this?!" *As he would look down he would find a empty AK-47 As he got that he would then say Humphrey: "Huh? What's this a Seden? *Smiling evily* "Oh it's time!." *Drives off in the sedan moving his head up and down repeating it with a >:) Face Humphrey: "I got A M19? And rounds for it?" "Good!" *He would hear gun fires and bullets hitting his sedan* Rival chó sói, sói gang: "Shoot that Nigga in the head!" Humphrey was poorly hitting the clutch and the sedan trying to go fast enough,What was he going to do? Humphrey: *Looks on his left side with a mad face >:(* He would ram into the left side making them go off road and hit a gas station,Rival chó sói, sói gang: "Oh shit Breaks Breaks!!!" *They would hit a gas station causing a blow up* *Slow motion as Humphrey escapes the explosion KAAAABOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOMMMM!!!!!!!!!!!* Humphrey: "There those bitches learned something Never mess with HUMPHREY THE SURVIVER!" "Who?" "HUMPHREY THE SURVIVOR!" FIND OUT IN PART TWO

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CoolSwagWolfAlt Fuck sake No it was a Dayz like thing there are zombies but they did not occur in the areas

Leonie12 ITS SOOOOOOOOOOO BORING!!! I ALMOST FELL ASLEEP READING IT!!! SERIOUSLY, YOU NEED TO FIX UP YOUR WRITING!!!! A 2 YEAR OLD COULD HAVE WRITTEN IT!!!!!! INCLUDE SOMETHING RATHER THAN BORING GUNS, AND HOW COULD A WOLF DRIVE A SEDAN???!!! U TOTALLY SUCK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! AND ZOMBIES???!!! U HAVE NOOOOOO IDEA ABOUT WRITING!!!!!! i dont care 4 offence anyway!!!

CoolSwagWolfAlt Your raging Calm down kid before I report you Ps You should fix your writing.

CoolSwagWolfAlt Falling asleep? This article is not 24 Hours Chill out its a fan made thing you piece of shit.

Kishin_Kira I don't mean to be rude, but, this needs work. I'm not saying this to be mean, but more as constructive criticism. Your grammar is WAY off, and I honestly can't tell what the hell is going on half of the time. Judging by this story, I'm going to take a wild guess you wrote this in less than 10 minutes. If you want people to read your stories and get better feedback, you need to spend a little more time and put a little more effort. I wish I could say not a bad start, but in all honesty this is way off. Good articles take a few hours to a few days or longer to write. I believe anyone can write, but its just you have to put the effort into it. Again, please don't think I'm trying to put you down, as I was in the same boat back in the day too. It takes time and effort to make good stories. So please keep up the work and keep practicing alright? :)

CoolSwagWolfAlt Guys I'm just trying to make an article don't be rude over it

Kishin_Kira I was only trying to give you feedback on your writing. Just keep practicing alright.

CoolSwagWolfAlt Ok ._. I just don't like abusers like Leonie