does any body like this song thing i wrote?

its not that good,and not much that twilighty ok here:

verse 1:
bạn are my everything, but what should i do when shes your everything, and im the one left outside crying myself...but bạn will never how much bạn really to mean to me....

Chorus:
coz the tình yêu i feel is too strong(too strong)
youve went and found her abd youve forgotten me so i think its time to go...coz u dont know what its like to feel somthing so strong and u kno u just cant hold on (ohhh yeahh)

Verse 2:
Pieces..pieces of memirues we had good times, and somtimes bạn looked at me like i was so much thêm than the girl-next-door, but youve went and fell for somone prettier and smarter than i could ever be (whoa yeahhohhh)

chorus

brige:
im leting..i have to let go of bạn like set bạn free but i kno ur not cumin bak and i kno its gonna kill me than u will ever kno so now its time...to let go...and now im dieing...(whoa)

chrous 2x

yeahhhhh cant hold on noooooo yeah yeah