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if this was on the back cover of a book, would u read it?

"the world didn't end in fire, though it was a daziling array of light...but it didn't go up in smoke. it did not freeze over, but it shown...it glistened 10,000 times thêm beautiful. no, the world....the earth and everything, everyone, on it....simply...desolved...desolved into a daziling dance of ngôi sao dust of all the màu sắc that made it plus 1,000 more..."
 zutaradragon posted hơn một năm qua
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KnougeChick said:
I wouldn't. Because the grammar is horrible, the spelling as well. And it really detracted from my understanding of it. I would if it was something like this, I might.

"The world didn't end in fire, though it was a dazzling array of light. But it never went up in smoke. It did't freeze over, but it did shine. It shone ten-thousand times thêm beautiful than a room filled with jewels, lights shining everywhere to further hiển thị their beauty. No. The world. The earth and everything and everyone on it simply... Dissolved. Dissolved into a dazzling dance of ngôi sao dust of all the màu sắc that could be defined, as well as thousands more."

Based on what I understood from this, that's what I thought was trying to be said.

Though this might be thêm fitted to be a monologue of the main character. hoặc the prologue. :33
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it IS the prologue, but it would b on the bak cover. btw, my spell check is broke and i don't shive a git about my spelling hoặc grammer on things like this.
zutaradragon posted hơn một năm qua
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I'm not attacking you. I'm trying to help you. And as a writer, myself, I've learned not to rely in spell check alone. Because bạn could have a sentence where you're trying to say: "They went to their house.", but bạn could accidentally type "They went to they're house." Which would be the wrong Their/They're/There. :33 hoặc something as simple as "You're welcome." bạn might type "Your welcome." But that would be incorrect, because I don't own a welcome, right?
KnougeChick posted hơn một năm qua
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*Sigh* bạn keep using all these excuses. And usually bạn make up excuses because you're too lazy to do something. Such as editing. And it's so obvious bạn don't want critique on this. bạn just want people to hươu con, nâu vàng, fawn all over it and tình yêu it and say that it's amazing. bạn don't want help improving so bạn can become an even better writer.
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JadTheWolf said:
Wow that's beautiful. I would definitely read it!
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thx!
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no problem :)
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no problem :)
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