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this is an English sonnet I had to write for my English class and I need to know if it is good hoặc not before I đệ trình it, thank you. also the rhyme scheme is ababcdcdefefgg
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My dear tình yêu bạn once were a shining ray.
In my eyes bạn meant the whole world to me.
Now everything about bạn is a shade of gray.
Like your beauty, your emotions, and your tình yêu is what I see.
However we must part onto our new paths.
Because our tình yêu is coming to its new close.
màu sắc were a beauty but now gray spreads its wrath.
I would tình yêu to feel again but now it’s a ghost.
Our tình yêu has left this earth for old times’ sake.
But when our tình yêu left it took bạn along too.
Sadly it left me with all this heartache.
Dying tình yêu was something I wish I had clues to
If someone told me tình yêu would never be easy
I would have chosen another path that’s breezy

He didn’t want money hoặc fancy cars; all he wanted was to be loved bởi someone, any one at all. He needed someone to care about him, not his wealth, not his ties to the rich and famous, someone that actually cared about him, the boy with bright blue eyes that sparkled in the sunlight, curly raven black hair and a boyish grin permanently plastered on his face hiding the pain of being alone. Yet no one did, all they saw was the heir to the Jeffrey Empire, the boy that was going to inherited it all. The boy, who was the prefect son living up to the Jeffrey name. They never saw the boy’s who’s arms were covered in cuts, the dao, con dao against his skin, the blood dripping down staining the carpet, his eyes closing never to open again. No one read the note tucked into his pocket cause no one cared.

I’m finished
I’m done
I can’t do this anymore

I’m through
I can’t last another second

It’s all I’ve ever seen
Surrounded bởi chaos
Filled with fear

Its’ all I can think about
All the Mất tích love
All the broken hearts
All the destroyed dreams
All the hopeless children
And devastated parents

Everyone who turned their cheek
Who ignored the cries
Of help and distress

No thêm kindness
Only monsters and demons
Who always kill

bạn took her from me
And now you’ll pay
‘Cause I have one final thing to say
—Good-bye World
—Hello Death and eternity

There is strength in my heart.
I have looked for it
For decades now.
Yet I have not found it before.

Now I have.
It will get me over every obstacle,
Every region,
Every country.

It makes me proud
To see this.
To see my strength
Laying there,
Waiting for me.
And me only.

This type of strength
Is called courage.
Perseverance.

Perseverance is the best type
Of strength possible.
And I have it.
Yes, me.
Never before,
Will bạn see me cower within the shadows
Again, like before.

I have changed.
And I am sure bạn will see that.
I have strength in my heart.

I looked into the window

to see the girl before me.

she was gorgeous, and beautiful

She looked strong,

she looked independent.

Her Mask was no longer there,

but what was on the outside was visible.

bạn can see the scars on her heart,

bạn can see the hurt in her eyes,

and the pain on her face.

But bạn can also see how it made her stronger.

She has đã đưa ý kiến "Enough is Enough, Today is the Day, and today i will be victorious"

she strikes the match,

and drops the flame, to burn her past

She smiles at me, and touches her face,

and she đã đưa ý kiến the words "Today is the Day"

Today I finally discovered, The girl looking back at her,

was me. :)