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Class that ngày was slow and boring. Our teacher, Kakashi, was dragging on and on about semi-aquatically evolving landscapes and my best friend Shikamaru was half-asleep as it was.
“Why is he talking about landscapes, he’s a math teacher.” Shika groaned, leaning his head on Kiba’s shoulder, catching a cold glare from his girlfriend. I laughed.
“Sakura is glaring at you.” Shikamaru turned around and glared back, an evilness in his eyes that made Sakura gulp and look away.
“You obviously don’t tình yêu her, so why do bạn keep her around?” I wondered. Shikamaru smirked.
“I tình yêu to break her.” He replied simply.
“That’s evil…I like it.” I laughed and shook my head. Sakura was the school whore and the fact that Shikamaru had been going steady with her for so long was surprising. I knew that it was killing Kiba though. I knew bởi the way he looked at Shika that he loved him.
“What about Kiba?” I nearly whispered. Shikamaru’s eyes got wide.
“Kiba is…mine. Of course.” Kiba blushed and looked down submissively. I sighed, becoming slightly annoyed bởi Shikamaru’s power to totally possess people.
“Then don’t bạn think bạn should be fair to him?” That came out harsher than I’d meant for it too and Shika flinched. I looked away, and tried not to be angry with him. I hated Sakura as much as the tiếp theo guy but did he have to hurt Kiba to hurt her? I then got an idea. So I passed him a note.
シカマル
さくらを傷つけるために他の方法があります。プロセスで木場を傷つける停止してください...あなたが実際に彼を愛し場合、この手順は必要ありません。今夜私に電話して、我々は、ピンクの髪の女を拷問するための新しい方法を考え出すことができる。
サスケ
    (The note said: Shikamaru, There are other ways to hurt Sakura. Please stop hurting Kiba in the process…if bạn really tình yêu him, this step is not necessary. Call me tonight, w