Ok so i wrote this a long time cách đây and i forgot i wrote i t and i want to know an HONEST opinion about and if i should keep on nghề viết văn i wrote two other chapters apparently but yea just tell me if i should write thêm with HONEST OPINIONS please?
Chapter 1
It was that crazy adrenaline rush that made me crazy for this sport. I took a deep breath as I stood tall in the serving position. The white ball rolled in my hand. I inhaled….and stared hard at the other side of the net. I breathed out. My breath exhaled and I chucked the ball into the air. I swung my hand back. The adrenaline rush was coming. I smiled. And I hit the ball with a large cái tát, đánh đập, smack and it hit the other side of the net to the other team’s side.
“YEAH CRYSTAL!!!!” My team screamed as they pulled me onto their shoulders. We had won the Middle School bóng chuyền championship for all of Oregon. Oh yeah because of me, the 8th grader with the powerful serve.
“YOU DID IT!!!” My coach đã đưa ý kiến laughing as the bleachers screamed and hooted for me. My parents stood clapping with wide smiles and my dad yelling for his only daughter. Crystal Chase.
It was all a blur, a massive crowd of screaming những người hâm mộ and students. My best friend Eclipse laughed as she handed me a water bottle. She wore her long pretty brown hair in a ponytail and she was drenched with sweat in her red jersey identical to mine. “Good job Crystal!!” She screamed over the loud noises as the other players kept talking. This was what I had been working for ever since the season started.
My parents ran down from their place in the bleachers. “We are so proud of you!!” My mom đã đưa ý kiến crying as she stroked my hair and handed me a bouquet of roses. My Dad clapped.
“I knew bạn were my little bóng chuyền player. Just like your Dad huh?” He đã đưa ý kiến while pulling me into a hug. I nodded.
My bóng chuyền team motioned for me to follow them. My friend Bailey screamed, “Come on Crystal!!! We’re having a party at Eclipse’s house!!!” She motioned for me to follow. I looked up to my parents. They nodded and I grabbed my stinky trái cam, màu da cam bag and ran down the hall to follow my fellow team mates.
After we ran through the grand door to Eclipses house we smelled like a bunch skunks. Of course Eclipse jumped into the pool, clothes and all, with a splash. They all jumped in with her laughing at our small stupidity act. We were a bunch of morons. I screamed as they splashed me with the cool water.
“Come on in!!” Mackenzie screamed with her red hair soaked down her back.
Eclipse swam over and pushed Mackenzie to the side. “She hates water silly. She’s….afraid of it.”
I growled but laughed behind knowing I couldn’t be mad…...because she was right. I looked away towards Eclipse’s mom who was grilling the hotdogs under the hot sun. I stretched out farther on my porch chair letting the sun’s rays soak into my skin.
“Crystal since you’re not swimming can bạn go up to the attic and get me some thêm chairs?” Karin, Eclipse’s mom asked me. Startled I nodded my head and slid off my seat.
As I walked upstairs Eclipse’s cat, Farlion, meowed wishing for attention. I pushed him away but he followed me as I opened the secret door in the phòng bếp, nhà bếp to the attic. I always got shivers up there. The wooden door slowly creaked open letting a blast of cold air hit my face.
“Come on Farlion.” I whispered to him I tip toed up the stairs not knowing why since there was no one to not be scared. I fearfully stared at the cobwebs on the walls. Finally I reached the attic which wasn’t much better in cobwebs. Lots of boxes and shelves covered the floor. I saw Eclipse’s old rocking horse that I remember playing on when we were younger. The dim attic light didn’t let me see much but in the corner I saw the two chairs folded up. As I grabbed them I noticed an odd box with the weird ancient nghề viết văn on it. When Eclipse and I came up here looking for stuff I always saw the old box, wanting to see it and the inside. But Eclipse đã đưa ý kiến it wasn’t to be touched. Staring at it then I longed to see what was beneath the folds of wood and deception.
I slowly set down my chair going over my idea. I knew it wasn’t a good idea….but what could be so dangerous in my best friend’s attic? Farlion made a hissing sound as he saw me reach for the lid. “What?” I asked him. His hind legs straightened and his grey hair went straight. “You won’t tell.” I đã đưa ý kiến almost laughing to myself at the thought.
Ignoring his cat pleas I speedily moved the lid. It was surprising light. I looked down into the box. It was covered on the inside with red velvet and neatly laid in the box were two necklaces. One was red and one blue. Fascinated with the fact that the so called ‘dangerous object’ was a piece of jewelry I reached my finger towards the red one. It was a red ruby with an odd black symbol in the middle. It was like a tam giác with a swirl dancing around it.
Farlion hissed and jumped onto another cardboard box. He stared at me with blue human eyes. That’s odd…I suddenly realized, A cat with bright sea blue human eyes. I pushed him away. I slowly reached for the diamond pendant. I tapped it quickly. It was…..hot. thêm like burning hot. I sucked on the black burn on my finger. I whispered about my finger and stupidly tapped it again. This time I kept my finger there despite the burning on the folds of my skin. I scrunched up my nose and pushed my finger down harder. Suddenly a giant glowing red light filled the room. I was pushed down bởi a weird force and I screamed being so confused what had happened.
The light died down in the attic but I didn’t get up from the hard wood floor. Farlion nudged me.
Then his ear perked up. I heard voices. Loud ones, voices I recognized.
“The chuỗi hạt, chuỗi hạt cườm called me mom!!!” A girl said. She seemed annoyed with her mother.
“Eclipse bạn have never touched your water pendent. If bạn sensed it up there out of…curiosity then I will be mad. If the ngọn lửa, chữa cháy pendent did find its beholder then-“
“MOM!!!!!!” Eclipse screamed as she stared at me sprawled on the floor my hand burning. Farlion meowed tiếp theo to me. Eclipse and her mother stared at me with wide eyes. I was confused like they knew something I didn’t. Eclipse looked away from me suddenly toward the red ruby pendant tiếp theo to my face.
“Crystal…..you’re…..”
“I’m so sorry I was just so curious and Eclipse never let me touch the box and I was so curious and it burned my finger so I was even thêm confused and and and and…..” My eyes began overflowing with tears. Eclipse reached for me.
She soothingly stroked my dirty blond hair. “It’s okay Crystal…its okay…”
“What’s happened to me?” I asked still crying.
“Don’t worry…you’ll find out later. It will be okay…”
The thing was….I wasn’t so sure.
*₰*
The Guardian temple of Alenfall mid-day
“What have bạn seen?” Cassidy asked me as she entered the room in her cape and red satin dress. Her dirty blond hair was braided down her back.
“I saw your sister, Crystal. She looked just like you. And….she has found the pendant.” I whispered as I sat cross-legged on the blue rug. My purple dress flowed around even if I was sitting. It always did, with the air whispering to me secrets and unknown things.
“Runner wants to speak to you. But I knew bạn were in a seeing so I had him wait outside the door. Can bạn talk with him?” Cassidy asked me with an odd tone in her voice as she added thêm ngọn lửa, chữa cháy to the small candle.
“Aren’t bạn happy your only sister has found her pendant?”
She rolled her eyes. “Sure.”
“You aren’t. Why?”
“I don’t know…it’s just I’m the older twin. I should have gotten the birthright of being the ngọn lửa, chữa cháy guardian. So why her? And anyway she hardly is my sister; she has never set foot in her trang chủ world since she was born."
I sighed. Her coffee brown eyes flickered in the ngọn lửa, chữa cháy light. Runner entered the room and quietly sat on the floor tiếp theo to me. He was quiet which so was unlike him. I twirled the long braid in my short hair. “She is like bạn in so many ways bạn don’t know Cassidy. And bạn two are supposed to be together. Don’t deny the great tiêu đề she has brought to your family. She is your sister after all. Your ‘Twin’ sister.”
I đã đưa ý kiến the word ‘twin’ a bit louder to give her thêm idea of this important. But her mood didn’t change. “I’m going to go find Ethan.” She stomped out of the room with her braid and cape flying behind her. I giggled after she left.
Runner began cleaning his tall sword. It was sharp with a good handle. “I sensed her.” He whispered.
“I did too. Another guardian like us. What if she doesn’t like us and the other guardians when she comes back into our world?”
“She’ll be fine. I’m thêm scared that she won’t be able to control her new powers. It was not fun when bạn ‘accidently’ pushed me into the tornado bạn created.”
I scowled. “We were five Runner.”
“Just saying, it was pretty painful. I flew into a wall!!” He laughed. This was the normal Runner, A tall strong boy with brownish hair and big brown eyes. He’s the guardian of energy. Explains why he can never stop being annoying. I cupped my hand and a small tornado twirled up.
“You want me to do it again?” I asked him while smiling deviously. He raised an eyebrow and frowned.
“N-n-n-no……”
“Okay then…..” I put my hand down and the tornado vanished into the wind.
The door creaked open. We both looked up at the exact moment. The other guardians entered along with Cassidy, Ethan and Mama Spahn, The Guardian teacher.
“Sit around.” She ordered as she pulled out a scroll from her tunic. Her long brown hair was in three braids each pulled into and odd formation. We all sat in our element formation on the rug. I stayed in my spot with Runner tiếp theo to me. Only four seats were taken. Runner’s, mine, Althea’s, and Lily’s. I sat in the corner at the air ghế, chỗ ngồi while Runner sat across from me in the energy seat. Althea sat in the earth circle. Lilli quietly sat tiếp theo to her mother, mama Spahn. The ngọn lửa, chữa cháy and water seats were empty.
Mama Spahn cleared her throat. Ethan sat in the back of the room with Catherine. “Our air guardian has seen the future right. A năm cách đây she saw one of our important guardians, Eclipse Guardian of Water, come trang chủ from earth.” Ethan’s eyes lit up at the sound of his younger sister. “She saw Eclipse come trang chủ with her family of course and with a new girl. One that looks identical to Cassidy. Her twin sister.”
The room was a bit quiet. Ethan smiled at the fact his family was coming back. The last he saw them was the winter solstice. “Hayden, our air guardian has foreseen the ngọn lửa, chữa cháy pendant be brought to its guardian. The ngọn lửa, chữa cháy guardian has been found. Her name is Crystal Chase.” Everyone began talking and I blushed when Mama Spahn talks of me and how I saw the future. Seeing the future is a power of air.
Cassidy was the only one quiet. Her face was red and her coffee brown eyes narrowed into nothingness. She was mad I could tell. Her family was told they would have the ngọn lửa, chữa cháy guardian of the 21st century. And they were told this 400 years ago!! But when Cassidy and Crystal were born they thought Cassidy was the guardian she was born first. But instead it was Crystal. I could understand why Cassidy was angry.
Suddenly we heard the sound of a loud horn blow at the front of the temple. We all looked up and to our surprise two footmen were at the door with a message.
Chapter 1
It was that crazy adrenaline rush that made me crazy for this sport. I took a deep breath as I stood tall in the serving position. The white ball rolled in my hand. I inhaled….and stared hard at the other side of the net. I breathed out. My breath exhaled and I chucked the ball into the air. I swung my hand back. The adrenaline rush was coming. I smiled. And I hit the ball with a large cái tát, đánh đập, smack and it hit the other side of the net to the other team’s side.
“YEAH CRYSTAL!!!!” My team screamed as they pulled me onto their shoulders. We had won the Middle School bóng chuyền championship for all of Oregon. Oh yeah because of me, the 8th grader with the powerful serve.
“YOU DID IT!!!” My coach đã đưa ý kiến laughing as the bleachers screamed and hooted for me. My parents stood clapping with wide smiles and my dad yelling for his only daughter. Crystal Chase.
It was all a blur, a massive crowd of screaming những người hâm mộ and students. My best friend Eclipse laughed as she handed me a water bottle. She wore her long pretty brown hair in a ponytail and she was drenched with sweat in her red jersey identical to mine. “Good job Crystal!!” She screamed over the loud noises as the other players kept talking. This was what I had been working for ever since the season started.
My parents ran down from their place in the bleachers. “We are so proud of you!!” My mom đã đưa ý kiến crying as she stroked my hair and handed me a bouquet of roses. My Dad clapped.
“I knew bạn were my little bóng chuyền player. Just like your Dad huh?” He đã đưa ý kiến while pulling me into a hug. I nodded.
My bóng chuyền team motioned for me to follow them. My friend Bailey screamed, “Come on Crystal!!! We’re having a party at Eclipse’s house!!!” She motioned for me to follow. I looked up to my parents. They nodded and I grabbed my stinky trái cam, màu da cam bag and ran down the hall to follow my fellow team mates.
After we ran through the grand door to Eclipses house we smelled like a bunch skunks. Of course Eclipse jumped into the pool, clothes and all, with a splash. They all jumped in with her laughing at our small stupidity act. We were a bunch of morons. I screamed as they splashed me with the cool water.
“Come on in!!” Mackenzie screamed with her red hair soaked down her back.
Eclipse swam over and pushed Mackenzie to the side. “She hates water silly. She’s….afraid of it.”
I growled but laughed behind knowing I couldn’t be mad…...because she was right. I looked away towards Eclipse’s mom who was grilling the hotdogs under the hot sun. I stretched out farther on my porch chair letting the sun’s rays soak into my skin.
“Crystal since you’re not swimming can bạn go up to the attic and get me some thêm chairs?” Karin, Eclipse’s mom asked me. Startled I nodded my head and slid off my seat.
As I walked upstairs Eclipse’s cat, Farlion, meowed wishing for attention. I pushed him away but he followed me as I opened the secret door in the phòng bếp, nhà bếp to the attic. I always got shivers up there. The wooden door slowly creaked open letting a blast of cold air hit my face.
“Come on Farlion.” I whispered to him I tip toed up the stairs not knowing why since there was no one to not be scared. I fearfully stared at the cobwebs on the walls. Finally I reached the attic which wasn’t much better in cobwebs. Lots of boxes and shelves covered the floor. I saw Eclipse’s old rocking horse that I remember playing on when we were younger. The dim attic light didn’t let me see much but in the corner I saw the two chairs folded up. As I grabbed them I noticed an odd box with the weird ancient nghề viết văn on it. When Eclipse and I came up here looking for stuff I always saw the old box, wanting to see it and the inside. But Eclipse đã đưa ý kiến it wasn’t to be touched. Staring at it then I longed to see what was beneath the folds of wood and deception.
I slowly set down my chair going over my idea. I knew it wasn’t a good idea….but what could be so dangerous in my best friend’s attic? Farlion made a hissing sound as he saw me reach for the lid. “What?” I asked him. His hind legs straightened and his grey hair went straight. “You won’t tell.” I đã đưa ý kiến almost laughing to myself at the thought.
Ignoring his cat pleas I speedily moved the lid. It was surprising light. I looked down into the box. It was covered on the inside with red velvet and neatly laid in the box were two necklaces. One was red and one blue. Fascinated with the fact that the so called ‘dangerous object’ was a piece of jewelry I reached my finger towards the red one. It was a red ruby with an odd black symbol in the middle. It was like a tam giác with a swirl dancing around it.
Farlion hissed and jumped onto another cardboard box. He stared at me with blue human eyes. That’s odd…I suddenly realized, A cat with bright sea blue human eyes. I pushed him away. I slowly reached for the diamond pendant. I tapped it quickly. It was…..hot. thêm like burning hot. I sucked on the black burn on my finger. I whispered about my finger and stupidly tapped it again. This time I kept my finger there despite the burning on the folds of my skin. I scrunched up my nose and pushed my finger down harder. Suddenly a giant glowing red light filled the room. I was pushed down bởi a weird force and I screamed being so confused what had happened.
The light died down in the attic but I didn’t get up from the hard wood floor. Farlion nudged me.
Then his ear perked up. I heard voices. Loud ones, voices I recognized.
“The chuỗi hạt, chuỗi hạt cườm called me mom!!!” A girl said. She seemed annoyed with her mother.
“Eclipse bạn have never touched your water pendent. If bạn sensed it up there out of…curiosity then I will be mad. If the ngọn lửa, chữa cháy pendent did find its beholder then-“
“MOM!!!!!!” Eclipse screamed as she stared at me sprawled on the floor my hand burning. Farlion meowed tiếp theo to me. Eclipse and her mother stared at me with wide eyes. I was confused like they knew something I didn’t. Eclipse looked away from me suddenly toward the red ruby pendant tiếp theo to my face.
“Crystal…..you’re…..”
“I’m so sorry I was just so curious and Eclipse never let me touch the box and I was so curious and it burned my finger so I was even thêm confused and and and and…..” My eyes began overflowing with tears. Eclipse reached for me.
She soothingly stroked my dirty blond hair. “It’s okay Crystal…its okay…”
“What’s happened to me?” I asked still crying.
“Don’t worry…you’ll find out later. It will be okay…”
The thing was….I wasn’t so sure.
*₰*
The Guardian temple of Alenfall mid-day
“What have bạn seen?” Cassidy asked me as she entered the room in her cape and red satin dress. Her dirty blond hair was braided down her back.
“I saw your sister, Crystal. She looked just like you. And….she has found the pendant.” I whispered as I sat cross-legged on the blue rug. My purple dress flowed around even if I was sitting. It always did, with the air whispering to me secrets and unknown things.
“Runner wants to speak to you. But I knew bạn were in a seeing so I had him wait outside the door. Can bạn talk with him?” Cassidy asked me with an odd tone in her voice as she added thêm ngọn lửa, chữa cháy to the small candle.
“Aren’t bạn happy your only sister has found her pendant?”
She rolled her eyes. “Sure.”
“You aren’t. Why?”
“I don’t know…it’s just I’m the older twin. I should have gotten the birthright of being the ngọn lửa, chữa cháy guardian. So why her? And anyway she hardly is my sister; she has never set foot in her trang chủ world since she was born."
I sighed. Her coffee brown eyes flickered in the ngọn lửa, chữa cháy light. Runner entered the room and quietly sat on the floor tiếp theo to me. He was quiet which so was unlike him. I twirled the long braid in my short hair. “She is like bạn in so many ways bạn don’t know Cassidy. And bạn two are supposed to be together. Don’t deny the great tiêu đề she has brought to your family. She is your sister after all. Your ‘Twin’ sister.”
I đã đưa ý kiến the word ‘twin’ a bit louder to give her thêm idea of this important. But her mood didn’t change. “I’m going to go find Ethan.” She stomped out of the room with her braid and cape flying behind her. I giggled after she left.
Runner began cleaning his tall sword. It was sharp with a good handle. “I sensed her.” He whispered.
“I did too. Another guardian like us. What if she doesn’t like us and the other guardians when she comes back into our world?”
“She’ll be fine. I’m thêm scared that she won’t be able to control her new powers. It was not fun when bạn ‘accidently’ pushed me into the tornado bạn created.”
I scowled. “We were five Runner.”
“Just saying, it was pretty painful. I flew into a wall!!” He laughed. This was the normal Runner, A tall strong boy with brownish hair and big brown eyes. He’s the guardian of energy. Explains why he can never stop being annoying. I cupped my hand and a small tornado twirled up.
“You want me to do it again?” I asked him while smiling deviously. He raised an eyebrow and frowned.
“N-n-n-no……”
“Okay then…..” I put my hand down and the tornado vanished into the wind.
The door creaked open. We both looked up at the exact moment. The other guardians entered along with Cassidy, Ethan and Mama Spahn, The Guardian teacher.
“Sit around.” She ordered as she pulled out a scroll from her tunic. Her long brown hair was in three braids each pulled into and odd formation. We all sat in our element formation on the rug. I stayed in my spot with Runner tiếp theo to me. Only four seats were taken. Runner’s, mine, Althea’s, and Lily’s. I sat in the corner at the air ghế, chỗ ngồi while Runner sat across from me in the energy seat. Althea sat in the earth circle. Lilli quietly sat tiếp theo to her mother, mama Spahn. The ngọn lửa, chữa cháy and water seats were empty.
Mama Spahn cleared her throat. Ethan sat in the back of the room with Catherine. “Our air guardian has seen the future right. A năm cách đây she saw one of our important guardians, Eclipse Guardian of Water, come trang chủ from earth.” Ethan’s eyes lit up at the sound of his younger sister. “She saw Eclipse come trang chủ with her family of course and with a new girl. One that looks identical to Cassidy. Her twin sister.”
The room was a bit quiet. Ethan smiled at the fact his family was coming back. The last he saw them was the winter solstice. “Hayden, our air guardian has foreseen the ngọn lửa, chữa cháy pendant be brought to its guardian. The ngọn lửa, chữa cháy guardian has been found. Her name is Crystal Chase.” Everyone began talking and I blushed when Mama Spahn talks of me and how I saw the future. Seeing the future is a power of air.
Cassidy was the only one quiet. Her face was red and her coffee brown eyes narrowed into nothingness. She was mad I could tell. Her family was told they would have the ngọn lửa, chữa cháy guardian of the 21st century. And they were told this 400 years ago!! But when Cassidy and Crystal were born they thought Cassidy was the guardian she was born first. But instead it was Crystal. I could understand why Cassidy was angry.
Suddenly we heard the sound of a loud horn blow at the front of the temple. We all looked up and to our surprise two footmen were at the door with a message.
What do bạn know about your fellow Campers?
HMM???
Well, here are some campers!!!
Down below are the Campers of ICHB :)
Randi, daughter of Nike
Alex, daughter of Hermes
Anna, daughter of Artemis
Mike, son of Poseidon
Evan, daughter of Hades
Lark, daughter of Artemis
Alec, son of Athena
Hon, daughter of Poseidon
Teddy, daughter of Hestia
They all have different personalities, but they are all best Những người bạn :)
ICHB is a place for family, friends, love, and happiness.
ICHB ROCKS!!!
tình yêu U GUYS!!!
Live - Laugh - ICHB!
HMM???
Well, here are some campers!!!
Down below are the Campers of ICHB :)
Randi, daughter of Nike
Alex, daughter of Hermes
Anna, daughter of Artemis
Mike, son of Poseidon
Evan, daughter of Hades
Lark, daughter of Artemis
Alec, son of Athena
Hon, daughter of Poseidon
Teddy, daughter of Hestia
They all have different personalities, but they are all best Những người bạn :)
ICHB is a place for family, friends, love, and happiness.
ICHB ROCKS!!!
tình yêu U GUYS!!!
Live - Laugh - ICHB!
Thanks for joining! Now bạn need your own cabin. First go to các diễn đàn and see if anyone else has your cabin. If your a Hermes kid and there's already a Hermes lều, cabin bạn have to tham gia the already existing cabin. If there's not already a lều, cabin bạn have to make bạn own.
1. Go to các diễn đàn and create a new forum
2. Name it Hecate lều, cabin hoặc whatever lều, cabin your in
3. Since bạn made the lều, cabin your now the head! Introduce people to your cabin.
4. Don't forget to give a small tour
5. Give any warnings that your lều, cabin may have
(Ex. Caution. bạn can get hurt easily ;]]])
6. Have fun!
If bạn do create your own lều, cabin make sure bạn danh sách everyone that's in your cabin. (Real people not book characters)
In your lều, cabin bạn can do whatever bạn like! bạn can post pictures, have parties, post videos, hoặc do something completely random!
Cabins so far.
Hermes- Alex (Head of the cabin)
Artemis- Anna (Head of the cabin)
Poseidon- Mike (Head of Cabin)
1. Go to các diễn đàn and create a new forum
2. Name it Hecate lều, cabin hoặc whatever lều, cabin your in
3. Since bạn made the lều, cabin your now the head! Introduce people to your cabin.
4. Don't forget to give a small tour
5. Give any warnings that your lều, cabin may have
(Ex. Caution. bạn can get hurt easily ;]]])
6. Have fun!
If bạn do create your own lều, cabin make sure bạn danh sách everyone that's in your cabin. (Real people not book characters)
In your lều, cabin bạn can do whatever bạn like! bạn can post pictures, have parties, post videos, hoặc do something completely random!
Cabins so far.
Hermes- Alex (Head of the cabin)
Artemis- Anna (Head of the cabin)
Poseidon- Mike (Head of Cabin)